Part 1 of chapter 1
It was a windy fall day, our main character, Taichi, was in his class as they prepared for a festival to ward off evil spirits and bring forth those of good fortune. "Well Tai, did you get a charm yet?" a random classmate asks as he hands him a necklace with a small charm with the symbol of truth on it. "May the wise greet you with kindness." Little did he know that that charm would be the very reason he trapped here. As he strung the charm around my neck, the bell rang for school to be dismissed. He began to stuff his backpack until he noticed an envelope finely decorated in gold, red, and black. He flipped it over to see a wax seal on it, and imprinted on it were the letters RSVP. He decides to shove it into his pocket and then leaves school. He soon passes an old mansion, its walls crumbling and the stoop was falling apart as well. The most noticeable feature was the graveyard that can be seen from the other side of the house. The sun was beginning to set on the day as he rushed home, the mansion still fresh in his mind. As soon as he walks through the door to his house, he runs off to his room to open the envelope. As he tears open the seal, the seal changes from RSVP to Thank You. Inside, there was a key of silver and one of gold and a note which read "To whom ever discovered this, We invite you to come to a little party this year. We've been dying to have you come for some time now. We request that you bring the keys included and dress in an elegant costume with a masquerade mask. The party is tonight at Meiro Mansion." Then the mansion flashed again within his head, but not as its crumbling form. Its elegance is only matched by the guest that attend the party. He rushes to the closet and pulls out a fancy red costume with golden buttons and silver lining. He then reaches for a mask that he made earlier that day for another party, it was black with small gems around the eyes and the mask itself. A crow then appears at the window and begins to tap on it using its beak, the window suddenly opens on its own. The black bird then hops in and transforms into a human like form. "Might you by chance be Taichi? I am Crove and I have been asked to escort you to the party." He was dressed in fine cloth, all black in color his mask seemed to be the most noticeable thing he had on with its golden beak peeking out through the hood of his costume. He then takes Tai under his long black cloak and jumps out the window with him. 'Soon' Tai thought 'soon I will hit the ground with the psychotic magician!' More birds swarmed around them, then they suddenly stopped in mid air and began flying. "So brother, you found him first" one bird said as it was transforming into another human like shape. "Hello, I'm Ravie." his Costume shone brightly in the moonlight, his black cape whipped around in the wind. They started to slow down as they approached the Mansion. "The party is just starting."
Aurthors comentary 2
Due to some of the graphic nature of the first part........I eddited out the most important part to make it so its more of a 3rd persion point of view......... stupid people cant take some of my writings! now i would like your opinion on this part of the chapter and what you think should happen next! PS:you need to fix the minor peoblem with long post soon its driving me crazy that it keeps going to the top while im typing down here!